Poem: Into Rust

rust
brittle orange
flaking away
each layer
eating history
that lies below
i scratch
with fingernail
breaking away
pieces of past
crushing it
between fingers
now stained
with iron oxide
metal blood
from the past
now gone
forever 

Another ekphrastic poetry prompt, this time from a dVerse prompt from Sanaa based on the image below.


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33 thoughts on “Poem: Into Rust

  1. “each layer eating history that lies below,”.. yes! My goodness this is such an astute observation .. further fueled by; “i scratch with fingernail breaking away pieces of past crushing it between fingers.” Love the approach and the raw emotions which you have poured here .. thank you so much for writing to the prompt! 💝💝

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  2. I think this is my favorite piece here for the prompt, tbh. Just the dark imagery and the tint that blends well with the photograph that makes it all the more mournful.

    Like Sanaa, I really adored these lines:

    “each layer
    eating history
    that lies below”

    Makes me feel as if we have the capability to taint the past with our present reality, such as in these lines:

    “pieces of past
    crushing it
    between fingers
    now stained
    with iron oxide”

    If I take it more literally, the car is old, was used for its time, and is stuck in its own “past” with history on its features of rust. This is so beautifully penned.

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    1. It’s always my feeling when I explore or touch old things, is that I’m destroying some piece of it. While nature would have done the job eventually, we definitely have the ability to speed ruin by our presence.

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    1. You do feel like you’re taking a piece of the past when you touch rust. When you see it you know you’re observing something that has feels to disrepair and has a certain age to it.

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  3. Very enjoyable take on my image and the prompt; terrific word-smithing. So ironic that steel seems to be indestructible, can be brought low by a handful of patina.

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    1. They were excellent pictures. I was cheering the choice of someone in Washington (and on this sides of the cascades it’s not hard to find things rusting from all the rain). I’m hoping to do some exploring over towards Yakima this summer to take some pictures and maybe see a few more stars than Seattle affords.

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