Strawberries red ripening in the sun Ready to be plucked off and savored Sucking sweetness from a deep kiss Juices run down sun kissed skin Pooling in the corner Of a lovers smile Beckoning me To kissing Away Sweet
A poem written as a reverse etheree (descending syllable count from 10) as a response to the dVerse prompt by Kim about fruit.
I’m also double dipping, and using it as my submission for #TankaTuesday for Word Craft: Prose & Poetry.
Be sure to check out both sites for awesome works and prompts.
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Beautiful, sweet, romantic, and sensual. Strawberries are symbols of so much whether it be intimacy, darkness, or sweetness. I think you encapsulated it all in here, the cherishing of such sweetness and how it beckons itself to the narrator. You did great writing in this poetic form, it flows naturally. Very beautifully penned!
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Thank you Lucy! I have a particular fondness for strawberries so I wanted to do them justice.
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A beautiful bite, indeed.
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Delicious. We both have a fondness for strawberries 🙂
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They’re the most delicious! 😋
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They are!
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This is a beautifully sweet poem. Love your metaphor here.
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Thank you!
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You are welcome!
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A mouth can definitely be likened to a fresh-picked warm sweet strawberry. I just planted a cast iron tub with strawberry plants and will be thinking kisses when I pick the first berry. Nice poem.
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That was a classic move, chocolate dipped fresh 🍓
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Strawberries and kisses! Perfect.
I like the way the shape echoes the shape of a strawberry – or half a strawberry, anyway, the way it’s formatted.
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Thank you, the challenge seemed like a good fit for a structured poem.
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Now looking at it, I should’ve centered it to get that strawberry shape 🤦♂️ I’ll get it next time.
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Sweetly succulent and beautiful! The first strawberry poem, I am surprised. They are a delightful fruit!
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I was surprised myself reading through. The Apple definitely got much more love, but I guess that’s what happens when you’re the fruit of knowledge and the ward of doctors.
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A sweet strawberry-shaped reverse etheree, that tantalised my taste buds! I love the thought of ‘sucking sweetness from a deep kiss’. I haven’t been strawberry picking for years – a must for this summer.
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I’ve been amused by the dance on the comments between wanting a kiss and wanting some really ripe strawberries. But strawberry picking can be a great date.
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The corner of the smiles-strawberry sweetness.
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A lovely reverse etheree tribute to your favourite fruit. Enjoyed. 🙂
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Thank you!
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aaaaah. love the form you used and totally got some fondness for this fruit.
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I appreciate it, I like playing with syllabic poetry.
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awesome!
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Beautiful reverse etheree. Now I have a yearning for strawberries.
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Better go find some quick, it sounds like everyone is on their way out to buy some 😁
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😊
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Lovely sensual poem! I enjoyed the idea of the juice pooling in the corner’s of a lover’s mouth beckoning for you to kiss them away….mmmmmmm 🙂
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Sometimes I feel like eating strawberries is the same as making love.
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Some are like the la petite morte
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Strawberries straight from the garden, a quick squirt from the garden hose, popped into his mouth as he pops one into mine …. ah, heaven. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem.
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Quite the summer time backyard image
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Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous! 💝💝
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Nice choice of fruit, sweetly presented.
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Yummy. What a nice display and verse. Strawberries are my favorite fruit. I could eat them until I’m sick, but you did one better, you immortalized them in your poem. 🙂
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TJ, your reverse Etheree is a sensual delight! The imagery is excellent… I can sense that kiss! Well done.
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This is gorgeous.
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